Here is the first draft of our thriller 'Raven Calls', we believe we have more work to do to make the final product our idea of perfect; we need to work on sound and some transitions between scenes. So far we have been given these areas to improve on:
- To put idents at the start (BBFC), Company logo, fades to black.
- Remove Starring – not needed.
- Repetition of ‘Raven Black’ (0.15) (This was a technical malfunction).
- Volume changes between first scene and Beth voiceover – needs to be more consistent.
- Too quiet in first part.
- (0.29) add some extra non-diegetic music. Subtle but tense.
- Cut from (0.36 – 0.43) to keep the pacing.
- Bring volume up a little (0.50).
- During the cuts between flashback scene and counsellor scenes need some dramatic sound for the tension perhaps cut to black.
- (1.18) Perhaps re-record Amy’s words, bring Beth up in the mix (louder) as we can hear camera focusing.
- Remove diegetic sound around (1.33) as it’s a bit windy.
- (2.41) ‘Jab productions presents’ needs to go at the start. At the end of the opening, fade to black .
We are open to anymore audience feedback and we hope you enjoy it!
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